LA Writing Assessment by Thomas Edison

07/10/11

by Viper's Poisonous Consequences

LA

MYP1/G6

An Alien Stole My Brain

This story is about a boy that nobody really likes at school. One morning, while he is in the state between waking and sleeping, he hears a voice commanding him to stand up now. When he opens his eyes, though, his mum is nowhere to be seen. When he listens again, the voice seems to be in his head! He discovers that an Alien inhabits his brain. It takes control of his body and brain and makes him do things that he thinks are embarrassing and that he normally would never have done. The alien tells him that it needs internet to log onto some site to be able to go back to its own world. When the boy comes to school, he goes straight to the library, intending to look up books that might tell him what to do if he was being possessed by an alien and to see if a computer was available.

I really liked how the boy discovered the alien in his head because it was written in a funny way. At first he didn't believe in it, but when he started talking with the alien, he was always being mad at it because it kept reading his thoughts. One time, the alien reads the boy's thoughts about this girl at the boy's school and makes the boy turn and grin at her. The boy thinks that this alien was going to ruin all his reputation (if he even had any left).

Another thing I liked was when the boy was in the library, a gang of three boys starts taunting the boy. The alien, on the boy's command, turns him into a vicious, blood-sucking monster. Then, he has a fight with the gang. He bites one of the boys in the neck and sucks a little of his blood. It tastes bad, so the alien makes the boy taste good tastes. I liked the fact that the alien can change the boy's appearance at will.

I really would only recommend this book to over-10-year-olds because at times, it can be a little scary, especially if you think the story through very carefully at the end. Then, it might scare you a little (it did to me).